summer 100 word challenge

Walking on a summer’s morning to a secret picnic spot I saw some purple flowers gently swaying in the breeze. Also, I noticed a bud that had bloomed into the brightest and loveliest flower of them all. The wet dew shimmered in the sunlight bubbly and bouncing off the soft smooth leaves.  Carefully I went to touch the velvety petals but the flower snapped shut catching my fingers. It was horrifying! I hadn’t realized it was a Venus fly trap. I will never ever walk that way again. Not so much my picnic but the flower had enjoyed my hand.

By India

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11 responses to this post.

  1. Posted by MrStu on July 5, 2011 at 10:29 pm

    A fabulously descriptive piece India. Glad to see you’re continuing your current form in the 100WC! Some terrific alliteration to develop your poetic description, with a little drama to finish. You included all five words from the prompt as well. A very well thought out ending to your writing too, India. Perhaps you should have offered the plant a sandwich instead of your hand!

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  2. India, this is a well thought out piece of writing with some excellent adjectives and adverbs. I love the idea of the plant eating your hand. A hand sandwich! Well done. Clare Powell (Teacher: Scunthorpe)

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  3. This is a stunning piece India. I have the picture of those flowers, the colour and the breeze. I really enjoyed the twist at the end! Great writing. Hope to see you next week too!

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  4. You have made use of some wonderful words, India. Your descriptions in the story were able to help me easily picture what you were seeing. A good writer can draw people into their story when they take the time to describe what is happening or what is being seen. Great job, India.

    Ross Mannell (teacher)
    Australia

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  5. Posted by Wendy Warren on July 7, 2011 at 9:06 pm

    Hi India, Abbey’s mum here. I’ve just read your beautiful piece of writing and just wanted to say well done! It’s fantastically descriptive and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it :-)

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  6. Posted by India on July 7, 2011 at 9:12 pm

    Thnk you again ross mannell

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  7. Posted by India on July 7, 2011 at 9:14 pm

    Thank you Mrs skinner

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  8. Congratulations on making the showcase for the Week 15 100WC, India. :)

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  9. A super piece of writing; you must be proud of the fact it was showcased. Well done. Mrs Halford (teacher)

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  10. Wow! India what a brilliant piece of writing. I loved ‘The wet dew shimmered in the sunlight bubbly and bouncing off the soft smooth leaves’, I could really picture the scene. Congratulations for being showcased this week.
    Galley Hill.

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  11. Posted by India on July 10, 2011 at 2:15 pm

    Thank you Wendy

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